Reflection: The story to really good, it makes sense and describers every idea well. There are some places where the story has be changed and now it does not make sense. Other than that the story is going great.
What I did: My heart was beating 100 miles an hour. As
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What I did: Changed my goody good sister to my sister who would never go anywhere without mum and dad.
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What I did: Fixed spelling, larva to lava
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What I did: Made it make sense, on to of
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Thursday 23 June 2011
Reflection: I think that the story is going great people are putting in more detail more and not going to fast. When they meet up with there parents there could be a bit more detail but other than that the story is going great and I can see it starting to take shape.
Read all of chapter 2. Told Mrs Stock that the story does not make sense. Read all of chapter 2
What I did: Ok cautioned Kobey started reading out loud what the scroll said.
Lila then looked at the scroll after Kobey and agreed that it was ancient Latin
"So what do we do now?" Lila asked looking at Kobey quite concerned.
While Lila and Kobey were sitting on a rock on Leisure Island
"AHHHHH!" Lila Screamed
"What are you doing?" Kobey shouted
Tuesday 21 June 2011
Reflection: I think that the story is going good the fist chapter is good. The second chapter could have more information and more detail. Other than that to story is good.
What I did: As we were leaving Mum and Dad looked at us , looking really concerned about us.
"I hope those kids will be"
I am shore they will be fine darling"
What I did: As I ran towards her with my hear full of joy
Read all chapter 3. Edited story
Reflection: The story to really good, it makes sense and describers every idea well. There are some places where the story has be changed and now it does not make sense. Other than that the story is going great.
What I did: My heart was beating 100 miles an hour. As
Before
After
What I did: Changed my goody good sister to my sister who would never go anywhere without mum and dad.
Before
After
What I did: Fixed spelling, larva to lava
Before
After
What I did: Made it make sense, on to of
Before
After
Thursday 23 June 2011
Reflection: I think that the story is going great people are putting in more detail more and not going to fast. When they meet up with there parents there could be a bit more detail but other than that the story is going great and I can see it starting to take shape.
Read all of chapter 2. Told Mrs Stock that the story does not make sense. Read all of chapter 2
What I did: Ok cautioned Kobey started reading out loud what the scroll said.
Lila then looked at the scroll after Kobey and agreed that it was ancient Latin
"So what do we do now?" Lila asked looking at Kobey quite concerned.
While Lila and Kobey were sitting on a rock on Leisure Island
"AHHHHH!" Lila Screamed
"What are you doing?" Kobey shouted
Tuesday 21 June 2011
Reflection: I think that the story is going good the fist chapter is good. The second chapter could have more information and more detail. Other than that to story is good.
What I did: As we were leaving Mum and Dad looked at us , looking really concerned about us.
"I hope those kids will be"
I am shore they will be fine darling"
What I did: As I ran towards her with my hear full of joy